note to self

As Deifyance wrote, the ending was definitely more exciting than the beginning. Perhaps you could start with the ending you wrote, then kind of backtrack for the rest of the ...

I can only agree with the reviews above, like those by Ohio and Penguin. The mood in this piece is established quickly and strongly, giving the reader a mysterious, creepy ...

This is great for a short peice. I really liked the descriptions of your narrator's family's moods and appearances, it was all very realistic for the situation. One part that ...

You're very descriptive in how your characters explain things to eachother. It's very smooth and easy to read and it flows nicely. The ending leaves the reader with a warm ...

One thing I love to see in fan fictions is two characters getting married or having children so I really enjoyed this. Luna mentioned above the names were a little ...

Very good so far. But I'm wondering: Why is this girl so angry? If you plan to expand this story it'd be great to look into your narrators past and ...